Open Mic Night

Here's something I wrote after attending an open mic with my mentor and her husband. Spoken Word poetry seems so different from anything I'd write.

Open Mic Night

Maybe I’m not doing it right.
Maybe I need to hyperventilate
To accentuate
My hate for the state
That the world is in.

Maybe I need a cluster of rhymes
Plucked straight from the vine
Of metaphor.
Maybe my fruit isn’t as ripe as yours.

Maybe my world view is a bit skewed
Because I’m too blinded by the view
of my own messed up world.

Maybe I should pause and say
Something steeped in insight
All smooth-like (like this).

Maybe I’m not doing it right.
Maybe I should sprinkle some wit
upon the tricks of love.
Allude to some hot, throbbing member…
…of the opposite sex.

And maybe I should rap about the school of hard knocks.
Be the brotha of a brotha from the rough ridin’ blocks
Of Suburban New Jersey.

Maybe I should raise my voice
Stand strong with trained and determined eyes
Be firm in my word though my shaky hands say otherwise.

Maybe I’m not doing it right.

you're totally doign it right
it's very good i like it

it's very strong and inspiriing

Its very good I like it. Have you written anything else or is this the only one so far?

evanescencefan91 said:

you're totally doign it right
it's very good i like it

it's very strong and inspiriing

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Thank you!
Everyone seems so lively up at the mic during slams and open mic nights. And they remember their poetry (which I can't do worth honeysuckle ) and are all socially aware which is totally not me xD
Just had to write something about it. (mentor's gonna be so pissed considering she wanted me to read something and I refused, yet I come up with this )

lonelymojoe said:

Its very good I like it. Have you written anything else or is this the only one so far?

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Well, I've been writing, starting out with poetry and screenplays, since I was 8 or 9. I've got toooons of stuff but it's all honeysuckle up until the most recent ones which aren't honeysuckle...maybe they're the flies that swarm around the honeysuckle That's higher up in ranking, right?

I'm glad you liked this, though. I was a little shaky about its sound considering it's supposed to be in spoken word style which...well...it's only supposed to sound good when spoken