"My Place" - Please give feedback!

[solitudeinside]

"My Place"

The only way I can express
Who I am on the inside
With a paper and pen compose
The aching in my chest

Invisible
I am to the naked eye
I’ve found my place
In loneliness remain

The only way I’ll make peace
With who I am on the inside
Is to sing these words alone
My heart will confess

Invisible
I am to the naked eye
I’ve found my place
In loneliness remain

Your silence scorns
Derision your absence bore
I found my place
Abandonment contained

In my mind’s eye your image burned
What I am you’ll never see
But through this glimpse obscured
Grasp what I could have been

Invisible
I am to the naked eye
I’ve found my place
In loneliness remain

Copyright © 2013 solitudeinside (aka me...please respect originality)

I covet your feedback...but only the honest and constructive kind...

 

[LonesomeLoner]

I like this. Nice words.

 

[solitudeinside]

I like this. Nice words.

Thank you!

 

[Gutted]

You miss-lead me there! Thought you were showing us your house lol

 

[solitudeinside]

You miss-lead me there! Thought you were showing us your house lol

Ah, the beauty of words...

 

[Gutted]

Can I see your house?

 

[solitudeinside]

Can I see your house?

How about...no. Get away from me, creeper! :club: (self-defense lol)

 

[Nikki]

I like it, very beautiful

 

[solitudeinside]

I like it, very beautiful

Thanks for commenting and for your kind words, Nikki! I'm glad you like it!

 

[Gutted]

Lol Creeper. Played Minecraft?

 

[solitudeinside]

Lol Creeper. Played Minecraft?

Actually, no, I haven't, but I know what a Minecraft creeper is lol...