what does it matter?

[DrunkenMonkey]

i have never written poetry but tonight i came home full of crazy emotions that i cant seem to get rid of. these stupid words came rushing out of me so i wrote them down. lame i know but i wanted to scream them to someone...

Im so jaded
my spirit broken
i dont care
about loves sacred token.

theres no one out there for me
i guess thats how it should be
does it really matter? i think not
it doesnt matter, just let me rot.

i know life is full of pain
maybe im just lifes utter bane
all i want is to hold her tight
but i should realize it isnt right...
not for me.

love is an emotion that i will never know
returned to me, my heart shant glow
her heart and life is unreachable
to me at least, so unbreachable.

i see her in my minds eye so sweet
just another unattainable treat.
if only i could win her love
i could again feel like im above
all the worlds petty problems.

to hold her in my arms and feel her warmth again
maybe then i could be a brand new man
such an unattainable joy
but to her i was just a toy.

she made me feel like love was real
what a joke, i can no longer feel.
please turn my heart as black as night
so i can wander alone in lifes stupid blight
alone, as it should be.

why cant i stop thinking about her
oh god please help me stop the hurt
im alone in my world and nothing can help
nothing but scars on my heart, they welp.

tears rain down from my lonley mind
staining my cheek for all eternal time.
i dont want to live without her strength
warming all around me.

oh Wendy why cant we be one
everyday together watching the setting sun.
my friends, they dont understand why
why i sit here and just cry...
i cry for you.

im a grown man with nothing left to lose
nothing left since i lost you.
you made me whole, you made me feel good
now my sadness is my normal mood

i think about you every minute of the day
please please leave my mind in some way.
i cant bear much more, the thoughts of you
my heart has died, its so true.

what does it matter?

 

[evanescencefan91]

awwww that was so sad and sweet

*teary eyed*


I really liked it

I felt it it had good structure

wait you can't be serious you can't say that was your first piece of poetry!!

it's too good to be novice

seriouslly I really liked it I thought it was great

you should right more

that must have taken a lot of thought, I've never been able to write something that long and keep it together so well

and

*hugs*

 

[PoWer2tHePeOpLE]

i agree, that was pretty good man

sad...

good rhyming skills bro..

 

[Badjedidude]

Was good. I'm not a poetry fan, but I liked it for some reason.

Song, perhaps? ^_^

----Steve