10 minute sonnet

[Thomas]]

A long time ago in secondary school, my friend wrote a sonnet. It was really nice and I was like 'I wanna do that'!

Anyway I said I would try and write one in 10 minutes before we had class. He said it was impossible! But I think it was strangely enough one of the better pieces I've written... Idk really. Everything just seemed to come flooding out as I wrote it =x.

Recently, these words have started to mean a whole lot more to me. So I wanted to get them out on here =x.

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It’s been so long since I last saw her face
She made it all so easy at her touch
I wish she could be mine, a dreamy place
Where she would be my queen I love so much
It pains me not to be there by her side
A dagger piercing my soul from the start
She is to me a beauty that I cried
For years since when she left and broke my heart
It seems unfair she does not understand
My feelings that subside when I pursue
My knowing she’ll be here to take my hand
When dark times make it all seem so untrue
When will she recognize the life I crave?
Most likely by the time I’m in my grave.

 

[Vagrant Legacy]

If you really wrote that in 10 minutes, that's truly remarkable. I've counted the syllables and stressed, and it truly seems to be iambic pentameter to the very syllable. Well done.

 

[IambicBlonde]

I don't believe you wrote that in ten minutes, lol. But on second thought it's very simple, precise and avoids any unnecessary descriptive pretense; a mistake one usually does when they have too much time to muddle it up. So, perhaps you did. It's pretty **** good, ten minutes or not; it's heartfelt, to the point and aching. Maybe I'll give that try.

 

[Dark_Poet]

Good job Thomas!