Awful Poem

[Naval_Fluff]

Well, for school I have to write a poem using as many concepts of horrible poetry as possible, trite language, inverse, etc. And here is what I wrought

I remember the day I swallowed a fly
Twas a horrible day I thought I would die

On my back I did lay, watching white clouds
Never before was silence so loud

Thanks to the fly, my voice it was gone
I thought I would perish, my end was anon

I did my best not to freak, but panic I did
The fear on my face could never be hid

I tried hard to cough, but my throat it was clogged
I was dying inside, I was sick as a dog

Like newly set jello I gave one final lurch
And spat the poor fly out onto the dirt

It's thin wings still wincing it fluttered around
Till I brought down my foot and flattened it down

My heart it did wrench when I saw that squished fly
But weep I did not for I was alive...

 

[Minus]

 

[Jesse]

Well, for school I have to write a poem using as many concepts of horrible poetry as possible, trite language, inverse, etc. And here is what I wrought

I remember the day I swallowed a fly
Twas a horrible day I thought I would die

On my back I did lay, watching white clouds
Never before was silence so loud

Thanks to the fly, my voice it was gone
I thought I would perish, my end was anon

I did my best not to freak, but panic I did
The fear on my face could never be hid

I tried hard to cough, but my throat it was clogged
I was dying inside, I was sick as a dog

Like newly set jello I gave one final lurch
And spat the poor fly out onto the dirt

It's thin wings still wincing it fluttered around
Till I brought down my foot and flattened it down

My heart it did wrench when I saw that squished fly
But weep I did not for I was alive...

I guess I really don't know much about poetry, I just attempt to put some together. Hope mine doesn't have bad stuff in it. If you're taking a class maybe you could teach me some things.

Otherwise, terrible, terrible poem. Great job!

 

[Naval_Fluff]

Thanks Jesse, your poetry is amazing, I haven't seen anything bad in them You might want to check out a book called In The Palm of Your Hand by Steve Kowit.

 

[Jesse]

Cool, thanks man!

 

[Haven]

The title doesn't do the poem justice. Nice work.

 

[Marissa_18]

I think its funny lol I like it Good Job