I killed the moon when I touched it

[Rayri]

i killed the moon when i touched it
It died right in my hand
Fell to pieces,
Made them cry,
So what ? i didn't care
A grin so massive,
Like the fool it was
Laughing harder
How's that for starters ?
They crowned it king,
A big eye shown
Upon its stage of mockery
i killed the moon when i touched it
A murder with the scene,
Not a trace of blood
In its past
An event forever unseen
i killed the moon when i touched it
Again, i didnt care
A forsaken fortress in the sky
Just like its glow,
All a lie

 

[Chasm]

i dont usually like poetry
as in never? LoL
but i like this
its different sumhow
*ponders*

 

[Rayri]

XD
Really ?
It seems like no one likes my writing anymore. Maybe because they don't get the underlying meanings to them ? i really dont know why i'm doing this.
Thank you though.

 

[Dark_Poet]

I really enjoyed that!

Thanks for posting.

 

[Rayri]

Awh thank you guys.
i really hate poems that rhyme but still i decided to make one. (Free verse right ?)
It makes me happy that someone actually likes it !

 

[Sci-Fi]

I like it, the title is very cool.

 

[Rayri]

Thank you

 

[Chasm]

right
ur meanings probably changed so the same audience wont like them
we all do tho
were all the right type of audience
n if iiiiiiiiiiiii like it?
its good LoL
i nvr like poetry

 

[Rayri]

Vhat do you mean by they probably changed ?@#
And thank you again

 

[Chasm]

k well u said "It seems like no one likes my writing anymore"
anymore?
means they did @ 1 time
not big on poetry but just like any writing depends on ur audience
change ur work?
ur audience will change with it usually

 

[Rayri]

Yes. from Elementary to Middle school everyone loved my writing.