Poem/song I wrote in third period today.

[Hijacc]

I may turn it into a song but who knows....

Take the pain
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Lost in thought, the battle now fought.
These things I see, So unnecessary.
Bent and broke, scared and choked.


Angels please come today,
come and take my pain away,

Now I ask!

Would you kindly look inside?
See these thoughts of suicide?
I'm a face without a name,
Soon a man gone insane,

Angels please come today,
come and take my pain away,

Humanity looks across the sea, remembering pain and misery.
Bodies lie dead and cold, Deceivingly this story unfolds.

Angels please come today,
Come and take my pain away,

Insanity, Is this use of profanity, we've lost control.
To the devil we've sold our souls.
Bleeding and pleading for the day,
The angels come and take our pain away.

I'm going to add more to it but this is all Ive got and needs a lot of work. And I'm not good at writing poems and this one took me 20 min's so yeah...

Any advice is appreciated...

 

[evanescencefan91]

oooh that's really great,

i really like it

 

[Hijacc]

oooh that's really great,

i really like it

Thanks

 

[Punisher]

Yeah its good dude, its better then the B.S i write and im 26

 

[Rebel001]

really nice hijacc

 

[Hijacc]

really nice hijacc

Thanks...

Im going to write another one today.

 

[Unacceptance]

Yeah its good dude, its better then the B.S i write and im 26

You're 26!?

 

[Punisher]

Yeah its good dude, its better then the B.S i write and im 26

You're 26!?

Yeah why

 

[Hijacc]

All we are
__________________
I see these faces around me
long gone just a thought
of hope and memory
these things long sought
these lessons we've forgot.

And all we are, and all we will be
has been lost, just a memory
Of a time of sanity, and priceless humanity.

Cant you see?

all you are, and all you will be
has been lost, your just a memory.

And your useless sanity, you've lost all humanity
and all in vain, you went insane
now without debt, you've payed with regret
and happy now, to the gods you bow
just for a god to love, and not to push and shove
there is no god above and no heaven to see

and you tell me

all we are all we will be
has been lost, just a memory
of a time of sanity and priceless humanity.

and before you blink take time to think
and with this hate,you participate
In a game plagued by sin, from the hearts within.

Newer one not as great I dont think...

 

[Hijacc]

I Miss you
_________
Where did we go wrong?
What did I miss?
I'm now just a hollow man.
Thinking of things that could have been
Dreams that should have been, and things that were


I miss your smile, and god knows its been awhile
Just another broken dream, to add to the burning pile.

unimaginable hurt, losing control, insignificant little things
I have locked inside lost to you, A mind less used and for
you I have given everything, My mind in shambles,
my heartbeat stumbles, my body trembles, Have I lost my mind?

I miss your face, it seems to have left this place, gone without a trace,
the torment of caring, the pain of sharing, Ive lost all train of thought, with
myself I have fought.

Your narcissistic mind, your vanity, hate, pain, love, makes no sense
leave me be in innocence. Here you leave my life again, leaving me to dwell in sin,
Here I see the markings on the wall, its your name I hear them call, spirits yelling far away,
come again some other day.


But most of all I miss your kiss, shelling me with total bliss, now I have only pills,
providing me with mild thrills. waiting until we meet again and live out things that
should have been, could have been, but never were.

So I wrote this song for you, of the long lost and few.

Ill miss you...

 

[Hijacc]

Think of me
---------------
Its your choice you should know
we try and this is all we got to show
now come with me and take a seat
find your faith, no more misery

It may seem liek its cloudy, no sunshine, only rain
but look in the clouds what do you see? even rain has a heartbeat.
When you see no hope, and you pull tight the rope, when you see no sun,
staring down the barrel of a gun. Ill be there.

Think of me and you will see theres more to life than misery.

Pull loose, the noose, you choose this abuse
While I wait in turn, Im watching you burn.
and with no will, youve sealed the deal.

Now think of me and you will see
theres more to life than your misery.


This ones incomplete and im going to be editing it to make it make more sense.

 

[Unacceptance]

Yeah its good dude, its better then the B.S i write and im 26

You're 26!?

Yeah why

Because it's surprising.

 

[Punisher]

Yeah its good dude, its better then the B.S i write and im 26

You're 26!?

Yeah why

Because it's surprising.

Ok ok you got me, im really 10 not 26

 

[Hijacc]

lol punisher.

 

[SimizAkri]

You're great. =]