Renewal

[Jesse]

Demons fly above a dark prison
that holds many men. There I
lie in my coffin, bound in chains
and with a white film over my eyes.
Curiously I see a hole punch
through the darkness. A glorious
trumpet sounds and a golden nectar
falls from heaven upon my face.

It rushes and sloshes all over my
body and spills over until it finally
settles. There i lie in my coffin,
bound in chains and with a white film
over my eyes. Yet curiously the
golden nectar seeps into my skin. I
feel it now. The chains are gone.
The blindness has been removed from
my vision. My lips are upturned
into a sparkling white smile and my
eyes begin to gleam.

I rise from my life-long prison
into the air with my arms outstretched,
my head tilted back, and my eyes closed
while the smile never leaves my face.
Portals of white light form circles
on my body until I am covered by the
colors of heaven. I am whole once more.

 

[Satchel421]

This is one of my favorites of yours, yet! The scenery is amazing, much better than most poems I've read or even written. The only thing I would suggest is to make it a little longer, but besides that you could probably write a whole book based on this one poem!

 

[Jesse]

Thanks dude! Thanks a bunch! I always appreciate feedback.

I am actually working on a book. I'm still undecided about whether or not to make it in poetry form.