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Naval_Fluff

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In a dark pit somewhere...
Long ago a weathered lady would sit by the sea
And watch the horizon with waves at her feet
From dawn until dusk to the distance she'd stare
'Till the salt of the ocean had caked in her hair

Her calloused hand and creased skin showed years of hard life
Memories of what once was play behind her eyes

Bodies entwined in a lover's embrace
A burning passion few can taste
A deeper link than most men know
The beautiful connection between two souls
Tight hugs and tears as the ship left port
But this was a love no distance could thwart

Month after month she would watch the sea's foam
Awaiting the day that her lover comes home
Her heart jumped in her chest when she spied a white sail
Beating harder when she saw the ship tattered and frail

Thirteen men walked the dock with their heads held low
She waited for more from the ship's hull below
After awhile the captain stepped out
Though his pain was evident he didn't scream nor shout

He simply walked to her side, tears hugging his eyes
"I'm sorry young lass, my hardest I tried."

The sky ripped in two as she fell to her knees
Oblivious to all she started to weep
She felt not the comforting hands on her shoulders
She knew only pain and her now broken armor

Many years have since passed, and if you ask she'll tell
"I'm just waiting for the sea to take me as well"
 
Dude. Fine material you have here. Very well done.
 
sad story.. well written though.

couldnt she maybe go on to get a double degree in aerospace engineering, make a bucket load in realestate ventures, set up a few community centres for the disadvantaged and find a really nice guy that sang to her on her birthday? just a thought...:)
 
Wow I love it =]! Love the way it rhymes and the whole feel of reading it.
 
The only problem I have is that the second stanza doesn't rhyme o_O

Otherwize its quite good :D

You should read M.S in a Bottle and The Maelstrom by Edgar Allen Poe. Both are two short stories about ships lost at sea and caught in a storm.

Your use of rhyme is very well done. ;)
 

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