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Drake

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I don't really write poems, so I wouldn't really call this my talent but whatever couldn't think of any other sec to post it in. Just wrote this for a special someone in my life right now..wouldn't mind some feedback.


Worries

Sometimes I sit and worry all night about you
Get up go to work and think all day about us
Will it all work out, what will we have to go through?
Will you be honest, are you worthy of my trust?

Is it possible you love me as much as I love you?
Wondering if it’s healthy to love you this much
Are your old flings and boyfriends still an issue?
Maybe my love and gestures to you simply aren’t enough


Do I scare you when I tell you my emotions?
Is this poem even any good?
Are you afraid to show others your devotion?
Hopefully I treat you as wonderful as I should

But when I hear you or see you things change
When I talk to you my heart drops
All the doubt and all the questions go away
The worrying and the heartache just stop

I’m reminded that to you I’m truly important
I can see it in your eyes that the words you say are true
All the bad thoughts that I once had were just distortion
Distortion from the truth, that you love me and I love you​
 
Drake said:
I don't really write poems, so I wouldn't really call this my talent but whatever couldn't think of any other sec to post it in. Just wrote this for a special someone in my life right now..wouldn't mind some feedback.


Worries

Sometimes I sit and worry all night about you
Get up go to work and think all day about us
Will it all work out, what will we have to go through?
Will you be honest, are you worthy of my trust?

Is it possible you love me as much as I love you?
Wondering if it’s healthy to love you this much
Are your old flings and boyfriends still an issue?
Maybe my love and gestures to you simply aren’t enough


Do I scare you when I tell you my emotions?
Is this poem even any good?
Are you afraid to show others your devotion?
Hopefully I treat you as wonderful as I should

But when I hear you or see you things change
When I talk to you my heart drops
All the doubt and all the questions go away
The worrying and the heartache just stop

I’m reminded that to you I’m truly important
I can see it in your eyes that the words you say are true
All the bad thoughts that I once had were just distortion
Distortion from the truth, that you love me and I love you​

Where's that crying face when you need it? :((
Drake, that is soooooooooooooo sweet!

The only thing that she might take offense at could be this:
"Will you be honest, are you worthy of my trust?"
The term "worthy" might make her feel like she isn't good enough. You might want to critique that just a teeny bit.
Otherwise, AWESOME!

((hugs))
 
Now that's more like it! ;) This is a side of You i think we all would enjoy to see more of mate! Nicely done! =)
 
EveWasFramed said:
Drake said:
I don't really write poems, so I wouldn't really call this my talent but whatever couldn't think of any other sec to post it in. Just wrote this for a special someone in my life right now..wouldn't mind some feedback.


Worries

Sometimes I sit and worry all night about you
Get up go to work and think all day about us
Will it all work out, what will we have to go through?
Will you be honest, are you worthy of my trust?

Is it possible you love me as much as I love you?
Wondering if it’s healthy to love you this much
Are your old flings and boyfriends still an issue?
Maybe my love and gestures to you simply aren’t enough


Do I scare you when I tell you my emotions?
Is this poem even any good?
Are you afraid to show others your devotion?
Hopefully I treat you as wonderful as I should

But when I hear you or see you things change
When I talk to you my heart drops
All the doubt and all the questions go away
The worrying and the heartache just stop

I’m reminded that to you I’m truly important
I can see it in your eyes that the words you say are true
All the bad thoughts that I once had were just distortion
Distortion from the truth, that you love me and I love you​

Where's that crying face when you need it? :((
Drake, that is soooooooooooooo sweet!

The only thing that she might take offense at could be this:
"Will you be honest, are you worthy of my trust?"
The term "worthy" might make her feel like she isn't good enough. You might want to critique that just a teeny bit.
Otherwise, AWESOME!

((hugs))

great point and thank you so much eve, I think I will change that lol. really appreciate it mom lmao ;) *hugs*

Robin said:
Now that's more like it! ;) This is a side of You i think we all would enjoy to see more of mate! Nicely done! =)

haha well i've been showin it a lil more lately, thanks rob.
 
lol thanks man, I actually wrote it in about an hour too. was surprised it all came out so easy.
 
That's the best way when it comes naturally. Its when you have to think about it, its not so good I think.
 
Drake said:
EveWasFramed said:
Drake said:
I don't really write poems, so I wouldn't really call this my talent but whatever couldn't think of any other sec to post it in. Just wrote this for a special someone in my life right now..wouldn't mind some feedback.

Distortion from the truth, that you love me and I love you[/align]


Where's that crying face when you need it? :((
Drake, that is soooooooooooooo sweet!

The only thing that she might take offense at could be this:
"Will you be honest, are you worthy of my trust?"
The term "worthy" might make her feel like she isn't good enough. You might want to critique that just a teeny bit.
Otherwise, AWESOME!

((hugs))

great point and thank you so much eve, I think I will change that lol. really appreciate it mom lmao ;) *hugs*

Robin said:
Now that's more like it! ;) This is a side of You i think we all would enjoy to see more of mate! Nicely done! =)

haha well i've been showin it a lil more lately, thanks rob.

Mom?! lol, better be glad you added that *hugs* after you called me that.:p heh, and you can bet I'm gonna get some crap from Z for that.:rolleyes:
 
(((((((Drake))))))))))
That was awsome! So heart felt. It shows how much you can love someone and how uncertain things can be. The best part is how she makes you feel when she is with you. Whoever she is, she is lucky! :)
Ahhhhh, wish I had a guy that could write me poems. ** Naleena dreams of of her own poet** Romeo, Romeo, wherefore art thou? **giggles**
 

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